Please Do Now:
- Answer the questions by commenting back to this post.
Today students will:
- Brainstorm Features
- Peer Edit Features
- Fill out Features Planners
Tonight’s homework is:
- Features Planners due Friday
Features Day
October 15, 2008 · 20 Comments
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RayL2012 // October 15, 2008 at 5:17 pm |
1. Byrnehurst principal claypoole at 11 o clock was notified by the police that there was a break in an d arson attempt in process.
2. The break in was noticed by students when they saw peoples shadows by a car
3. the byrnhust Hinotes esemblem won first place against 12 other schools. this was there first competition.
4. Because they had won first place they now qualify for states
5. byrnhust prom is not like any other. it will have games and be more exquisite then ever
6. at the last board meeting they voted on a new rule that would make block schedule like no other.
patrickquinlan // October 15, 2008 at 5:17 pm |
1. Around 11 PM, principal Kevin Claypoole was notified of the attempted break-in and arson.
Before: 23 After: 14
2.a Group of Byrenhurst students were the first to alert 911 of the break-in as they drove by and noticed a group of shadowy figures.
Before: 31 After: 25
3. The Byrenhurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, placed first out of 12 at the district vocal music competition at Sutter state University on March 31, while competing in the competiton for the first time
Before: 51 After: 33
4. The ensemble will participate in the state vocal competition amongst all of the other district winners.
Before: 33 After: 16
7y13r // October 15, 2008 at 5:17 pm |
1. Byrnehurst principle Kevin Claypoole was notified of an in progress break-in and attempted arson by the police shortly after 11 P.M.
B:25 A:21
2. A group of Byrnehurst students called 911 after noticing the break-in, having seen shadowy figures while passing by in a car.
B:31 A:21
3.
xkatastrophe // October 15, 2008 at 5:17 pm |
1. Brynehurst Principle Kevin Claypool was notified by police about the break in and the progressing arson attempt shortly after 11 pm.
Before: 24 After: 21
2. Brynehurst students first noticed the break in while passing by in a car and called 911 to report the shadowy figures they saw running from the building.
Before: 32 After: 27
3. The 16 member Brynehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, placed first out of 12 schools in their first district vocal music compettition at Sutter State University on March 31
Before: 52 After: 28
LyssaG2011 // October 15, 2008 at 5:17 pm |
1) Police notified Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole of the break-in and attempted arson shortly after 11 P.M.
Words: 15
2) A group of Byrnehurst students noticed shadowy figures running from the building.
Words: 12
3) The HiNotes, Byrnehurst’s mixed ensemble, placed first out of 12 schools in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31.
Words: 24
4) Because of their first-place win, The Hi-Notes landed a spot in the state contest to compete with other district winners.
Words: 20
5) Commmittees of parents and students have been working to make this year’s prom, Byrnehurst Sparkles, a safe and fun night. They have planned various games and contests to last all night.
Words: 30
6) As a result of the last board of education meeting, a new block scheduling system was adopted to allow students to be enrolled in only four classes each semester.
kevins2011 // October 15, 2008 at 5:18 pm |
1. Shortly after 11 p.m., Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole was notified of the break-in and attempted arson.
Before: 22 After: 15
2. The break-in was noticed when a group of students passed by and called 911 to report shadowy figures running from the building.
Before: 31 After: 22
3. The Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, placed first against 12 other schools in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31. It was their first time in this competition.
Before: 52 After: 33
4.
jessicaw2010 // October 15, 2008 at 5:18 pm |
Excercise 1B
1. Byrnehurst Principal, Kevin Claypoole was notified by the police shortly after 11pm about the break-in and attempted arson.
Before: 24
After: 19
2. The students driving by called 911 to report shadowy figures running from the building who participated in the break-in.
Before: 32
After: 19
3. The district vocal compettition at Sutter State University on March 31st is composed of 16 students singing in the HiNotes Byrnehurst mixed ensemble for the first time against 12 other schools in the district.
Before: 52
After: 34
4. The Ensembles won the top spot in the district vocal music contest so they participated int he state contest, which includes winners from all over the state.
Before: 33
After: 27
5. Byrnehurst Sparkles Committee is made up of students and parents and is in charge of preparing this years prom by planning games and contests. They’ve been working for months to make this it a safe and fun night.
Before: 56
After: 38
allisonnovack // October 15, 2008 at 5:18 pm |
1) Shortly after 11 pm,Police notified Byrnhurst Pricipal Kevin Claypoole about the breaking in and attempted arson in progress.
B4: 22 after: 19
2) A group of Burnchurst students noticed the break in while driving by, and they called 911 to inform them of shadowy figures running from the building.
B4: 32 after:26
3) The 16 HiNotes of the Byrnchurst mixed ensemble placed first against 12 other schools entered in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31. This was the HiNotes first time ever competing.
B4: 52 after: 36
4) Because the ensembles performance won first place in the district vocal music contest, they will now move on to the state contest, competing against many others from around the state.
B4: after:
5) The Burnhurst sparkles, committees made up of students and parents, have been working to make prom safe and fun. They have planned games and contests which will take place throughout the night.
6) Board members chose to adopt a new kind of scheduling …
jessekirk11 // October 15, 2008 at 5:26 pm |
1. Police notified Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole of the break-in and attempted arson in progress shortly after 11 PM.
19
2. The break-in was first reported by a group of Bynehurst students who noticed shadowy figures running from the building.
20
3. The 16 members of the HiNotes, Bynehurst’s mixed ensemble, placed first against 12 other schools in their first district competition, which took place on March 31 at Sutter State University.
30
4. The ensemble’s performance landed it a spot in the state competition, where other district winners from around the state competed.
20
5. The Byrnehurst Sparkles, committees made up of both students and parents, have been working for months to make this year’s prom both safe and fun, with games that will go on all night.
33
6. Board members chose to adopt a new kind of block scheduling in which students would be enrolled in only 4 classes per semester.
23
brittanywaserstein // October 15, 2008 at 5:30 pm |
1) The police notified Byrnehurst Pincipal Kevin Claypoole, shortly after 11pm, about the breakin attempting arson.
Before: 22
After: 15
2) Byrnehurst students noticed the break-in and called 911 as they passed in a car and saw shadows running from the building.
Before: 31
After: 21
3) Students sing in the Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, HiNotes, which contains 16 members. March 31, at the music competetion at Sutter State University, was HiNotes first time to be in this competetion.
Before: 52
After: 31
4) The Ensemble’s performance won the top spot in the district vocal music contest and landed in the state contest made up of district winners.
Before: 33
After: 24
5) Byrnehurst sparkle committee is made up of students and parents and is in charge of preparing this years prom by planning games and contests. They’ve been working for months to make this a safe and fun night.
Before: 56
After: 38
6) Board members adopted a new and different block scheduling at the last meeting of the board of education, allowing students to enroll in four classes per semester.
Before: 33
After: 27
laurenpeterson1 // October 15, 2008 at 5:35 pm |
1) Police notified Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole of the break-in and attempted arson shortly after 11 P.M.
Words: 15
2) A group of Byrnehurst students noticed shadowy figures running from the building.
Words: 12
3) The HiNotes, Byrnehurst’s mixed ensemble, placed first out of 12 schools in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31.
Words: 24
4) Because of their first-place win, The Hi-Notes landed a spot in the state contest to compete with other district winners.
Words: 20
5) Commmittees of parents and students have been working to make this year’s prom, Byrnehurst Sparkles, a safe and fun night. They have planned various games and contests to last all night.
Words: 30
6) As a result of the last board of education meeting, a new block scheduling system was adopted to allow students to be enrolled in only four classes each semester.
hrynor // October 15, 2008 at 5:44 pm |
1. Shortly after 11 p.m., Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole was notified by police of the break – in and attempted arson which was then in progress.
The police notified Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole about the break – in and attempted areson in progress shortly after 11 p.m.
Word count: Before 23 After 19
2. The break – in was first noticed when a group of Byrnehurst students passed by in a car and called 911 to report that they had noticed shadowy figures running from the building.
Byrnehurst students passed by in a car and noticed a shadowy figure run from the building and called 911.
Word count: Before: 31 After: 19
3. The students who sing in the Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, which is comprised of 16 members, placed first 12 other schools that were entered in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31. This was the HiNotes’ first time ever to take part in this competition.
The Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, placed first in the district vocal music competition, even though it was their first time participating in the contest. The contest took place at Sutter State University on March 31.
Word count: Before: 51 After: 35
4. Because the ensemble’s performance won the top spot in the district music contest, the group landed a spot in the state contest in which district winners from all over the state compete.
The ensemble will be participating in the state contest with other district winners.
Word Count: Before: 33 After: 13
5. In preparation for this year’s prom, Byrnehurst Sparkles, committees which are made up of both students and parents have been working for months to make this night a night that will be both safe and fun. Among other things they have been planning various types of games and contests which will go on all night long.
Byrnehurst Sparkles committees, made up of students and parents, are working hard to make prom night a night that is both safe and fun. They have planned games and contests lasting all night long.
Word Count: Before: 56 After: 34
6. At the last board of education meeting, board members chose to adopt a new and different type of block scheduling which allows students to be enrolled in only four classes during each semester.
Members chose to adopt a different type of block scheduling that allows students to enroll in only four classes each semester, at the board of education meeting.
Word Count: Before: 33 After:27
molliee // October 15, 2008 at 6:00 pm |
1.Shortley after 11 p.m., Byrnehurst Principle Kevin Claypoole was notified by police of the break-in attempted arson which was then in progress.
wordcount:
Before- 24
1. Byrnehurst Principle Kevin Claypoole was notified of the break-in attemped arson by the police shortly after 11 p.m.
after- 13
2. The break-in was first noticed when a group of byrnehurst students passed by in a car and called 911 to report that they had noticed shadowy figures running from the building.
Wordcount:
Before- 32
2. The break-in was noticed when Byrnehurst students passed by in a car, and saw shadowy figures running from the building and called 911.
After- 24
3. The students who sing in the Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, which is comprised of 16 members, placed first against 12 other schools that were entered in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31. This was the HiNotes’ first time to ever take part in this competition.
Wordcount:
Before- 52
3. The Byrenhurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, placed first out of 12 at the district vocal music competition at Sutter state University on March 31,this was their first competition.
After- 29
4. Because the ensemble’s performance won the top spot in the district vocal music contest, the group landed a spot in the state contest in which district winners from all over the state compete.
Wordcount:
Before- 33
4. Because of the ensemble’s performance in the district vocal music contest, they landed a spot in the state competition, where other district winners from around the state competed.
After- 28
5. In preparation for this year’s prom, Byrnehurst Sparkles, committees which are made up of both students and parents have been working for months to make this night that will be both safe and fun. Among other things they have been planing various types of games and contests which will go on all night long.
Wordcount:
Before- 56
5. Commmittees of parents and students have been working for months to make this year’s prom, Byrnehurst Sparkles, a safe and fun night. They have planned various games and contests to last all night.
After- 33
6. At the last board of education meenting, board members chose to adopt a new and different type of block sheduling which allows students to be enrolled in only four classes during each semester.
wordcount:
Before- 33
6. At the last board of education meeting, a new block scheduling system was adopted to allow students to be enrolled in only four classes each semester.
After- 26
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madisonjsanders // October 15, 2008 at 6:01 pm |
1. Shortly after 11 P.M., Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole was notified by police of the break-in and attempted arson which was then in progress.
- The police notified Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole of a break-in, and attempted arson shortly after 11.
- Word count: Before: 23 After: 16
2. The break-in was first noticed when a group of Byrnehurst students passed by in a car and called 911 to report that they had noticed shadowy figures running from the building.
- Byrnehurst students reported the break-in while driving past shadowy figures leaving the building.
- Word count: Before: 31 After: 13
3. The students who sing in the Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, which is comprised of 16 members, placed first against 12 other schools that were entered in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31. This was the HiNotes’ first time ever to take part in this competition.
- The 16 members of the Byrnehurst mixed ensemble, HiNotes, placed first against 12 other schools that entered in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31. This was the HiNotes’ first time participating in the competition.
- Word count: Before: 52 After: 40
4. Because the ensemble’s performance won the top spot in the district vocal music contest, the group landed a spot in the state contest in which district winners from all over the state compete.
- By placing first in the district vocal music contest, they will participate in the state contest with other district winners.
- Word count: Before: 33 After: 20
5. In preparation for this year’s prom, Byrnehurst Sparkles, committees which are made up of both students and parents have been working for months to make this night a night that will be both safe and fun. Among other things they have been planning various types of games and contests which will go on all night long.
- The student-parent Byrnehurst Sparkles committee worked for months to make prom night safe and fun by planning various games and contests.
- Word count: Before: 56 After: 22
6. At the last board of education meeting, board members chose to adopt a new and different type of block scheduling which allows students to be enrolled in only four classes during each semester.
- Board members established a new and different type of block scheduling at the last board of education meeting where a student may be enrolled in only four classes per semester.
- Word count: Before:33 After: 30
rachelcoller // October 15, 2008 at 6:08 pm |
The police notified Principal Kevin Claypoole that a break-in and attempted arson in progress shortly after 11 PM.
Before: 23 After: 19
The first to notice the crime was a group of Byrnehurst student s who called 911 after seeing shadowy figures running from the building.
Before: 31 After: 23
The HiNotes, a mixed ensemble, comprised of 16 members placed first on March 31st against 12 other schools at Sutter State University. This was the HiNotes ‘ first time competing at this event.
Before:51 After: 32
Since the ensemble won the district vocal music competition the group advanced to the state contest where they will compete against other district level winners.
Before: 33 After: 25
A committee made up of parents and students, worked for months to make this year’s prom, Byrnhurst Sparkles, fun and safe. The prom will include contests and games which will go on all night.
Before: 56 After: 34
At the last meeting the board members adopted a new block schedule where students can only enroll in 4 classes each semester.
Before: 33 After: 22
carmenk2012 // October 15, 2008 at 11:22 pm |
1. At 11 PM, the police notified Brynehurst Principal Kevin Claypool about the in-progress attempted arson and break-in.
Before: 24
After: 19
2. A group of Brynehurst students passing by in a car noticed the break-in, called 911 and reported shadowy figures running from the building.
Before: 32
After: 24
3. The 16-membered Brynehurst mixed ensemble, the HiNotes, placed first against 12 other schools their first time competing in the district vocal music competition held at Sutter State University on March 31.
Before: 52
After: 32
4. Because of their performance, the ensemble advanced to the state competitions where all the district winners in the state compete.
Before: 33
After: 20
5. Committees made of students and parents have been working for months to make this year’s prom, Brynehurst Sparkles, which will include various types of games and contests, both safe and fun.
Before: 56
After: 31
6. A new and different type of four-class semester block scheduling was adopted by board members at the last meeting.
Before: 33
After: 20
patrickquinlan // October 16, 2008 at 1:38 am |
5. committees of parents and students, the Bryenhurst Sparkles, have prepared nightlong games and events to make tonight’s prom safe and fun.
Before: 56 after: 21
6. Board Members adopted a plan to allow students to enroll in 4 classes per semester at the last board of education meeting.
Before: 33 After: 22
nadineg2012 // October 16, 2008 at 10:27 pm |
1) The police informed Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole of the break-in and attempted arson in progress shortly after 11 PM.
After: 19
2) A group of Byrnehurst students first noticed the break-in and called 911 after passing by in a car and noticing shadowy figures running from the building.
After: 26
3) The Byrnehurst HiNotes, a mixed ensemble comprised of 16 members, placed first against 12 other schools in their first district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31.
After: 30
4) The group’s victory landed them a spot to compete against other district winners in the state vocal contest.
After: 18
5) For months, committees of students and parents have been working to make Byrnehurst Sparkles, the school prom, safe and fun by planning games and contests for the night.
After: 28
6) After the meeting, the board of education adopted a new type of block scheduling that allows students to take 4 classes each semester.
After: 23
alicel2011 // October 17, 2008 at 12:13 am |
1. The police notified Byrenhurst Principle, Kevin Claypoole after 11p.m of attempted arson and break- in, already in progress.
Before-22
Now- 19
2. Passing by Byrenhurst students first called 911 to report the break in when they noticed people in the building.
Before-32
After-19
3. Hi-notes, Byrenhurt’s music mix ensemble were placed first against 12 other schools in the district’s vocal competition at Sutter State University on March 31. This was only their first time in the competition.
Before-52
After-34
4. The ensemble’s performance landed a spot in the state’s contest where other district winners also compete because they won top spot in their district.
Before-33
After-25
5. The Byrenhurst Sparkles committees composed of parents and students are planning this year’s prom to make it a night of safety and fun like a variety of games and contests that will be going all night long.
Before-56
After-38
6. After their last meeting Board members adopted a new and different type of block scheduling which allowed students to be enrolled in four classes each semester.
7. Before-33
After-27
lenac2011 // October 17, 2008 at 1:13 am |
1. Police notified Byrnehurst Principal Kevin Claypoole, shortly after 11 pm, of the then in progress break-in and attempted arson.
Before: 24
After:21
2. When a group of Byrnehurst students passed by in a car, noticing shadowy figures running from the building, they called 911 to report the break-in.
Before:32
After:25
3. The HiNotes, students who sing in the Byrnehurts mixed ensemble made up of 16 members, first time taking part in the district vocal music competition at Sutter State University on March 31, placed first against 12 other students.
Before: 51
After: 38
4. The group landed a spot in the state contest in which district winners form all over the state compete due to winning the top spot in the district vocal music contest.
Before: 33
After: 31
5. The Byrnehurts Sparklers, committees which are made up of both students and parents, have been planning for months, various types of games and contests which will go on all night long to make this year’s prom a night that will be both safe and fun.
Before: 59
After: 45
6. Chosen at the last board meeting, board members adopted a new and different type of block scheduling which allows students to be enrolled in only four classes during each semester.
Before: 33
After: 30