Please Do Now:
- Read the following stories based on your section:
- SPORTS: http://www.rockvillerampage.com/?article=1589
- NEWS: http://www.rockvillerampage.com/?article=1577
- FEATURES: http://www.rockvillerampage.com/?article=1578
- OPINION: http://www.rockvillerampage.com/?article=1556
- ARTS & ENTERTAINMENT: http://www.rockvillerampage.com/?article=1556
- Critique the article for its news value, lead, use of quotes, etc.
Today, students will:
- HOF STUDENTS: Work as a group to transcribe all of your notes and quotes and write a 750 word first draft article on the HOF induction ceremony.
- Everyone else: You need to have first drafts done by today!
- Don’t forget: Midmarking grades are due one week from today. This means that you need to have at least one of your three assignments completely finished (with prewriting and reflection) by Monday. I suggest you peer edit and get your editor’s feedback ASAP!
Tonight’s homework is:
- Contact editors
- Revise drafts
- Write reflection pieces
17 responses so far ↓
arielaz2009 // November 20, 2007 at 6:08 pm |
Rockville Rampage, Reaper Review
The review is very descriptive and gives a full indepth look at the CW show “Reaper” as well as the entire cast. It also gives much needed background information about the plot and purposely lacks uneeded or any quotes.
amaliar2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:08 pm |
Lead: The lead is well written, but a bit drawn out. It shows alot of opinion, but it’s not a news piece, so that’s okay
Structure: It has a wineglass structure, the important details are in the beginning and it has some in the end as well.
News Value: It is timely since it talks about an oncoming season and it holds human interest as it talks about a popular sport.
Use of Quotes: The use of quotes is good and portrays the thought of the author but it needs some quotes from members of the team.
mariap2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:08 pm |
The article had a pretty good lead that answered most of the 5ws and the h. It voices the writers opinion and provides great information. It is in the wineglass structure and yopu do have a quote in the second paragraph which is good. overall great article
mariap2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:09 pm |
Also, it is a relevant problem with the persons school and it does affect a lot of kids so it has more than one news value
amandae2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:10 pm |
Although the article has a good lead, it is way too repetitive, and the writing is not very formal.
It is very bland and does not really keep you engaged or makes you want to watch the show.
I like the idea of reviewing tv shows, because that is always a very constant and up to date thing. But the article is not … good?
alessiap2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:10 pm |
news value, lead, use of quotes, etc.
-I think that the article “New AP Pre-registration Policies Implemented” is very well-fit for a school article and pertains perfectly especially to this time of the year.
-The piece is an appropriate length and kept my attention long enough to obtain all the necessary information.
-The use of quotes included significant people, and the right amount of information from them. There wasn’t a quote per paragraph, and for all we know it could be her opinion (?) because she doesn’t exactly state the source where she obtained her info from.
- The lead sentance is great because it throws you right into the situation, informs you about the past, and tells you how the future situations will be.
vanessav2o11 // November 20, 2007 at 6:10 pm |
The lead was okay although it started with a question. There is no use of quotes but the overall article was very descriptive and enjoyable =)
stephaniea2009 // November 20, 2007 at 6:10 pm |
Opinion Article:
This is an opinion piece
so therefore the number of facts are minimal since the facts in an opinion story are only used in they support the idea you are trying to get across .
LEAD
The lead for this piece was straight to the point and it made her opinion evident from the very beggining !
LEAD:
As schools around the world become increasingly competitive, more students are being pressured to take aggressive AP courses, but the question is…do most students really belong in them?
straight to the point and off the bat states her opinion !!
QUOTES
I think she could have used more quotes in her story to give support to her opinion , the writer only gave two quotes and they were from the same person
HOWEVER !
I really like the piece and it was strictly her opinion which was evident through the entire article (;
carlosm2010 // November 20, 2007 at 6:11 pm |
I think that the article had a good lead, it discribed the who the what(self explanitory) when where and the why is explained later on. One thing i did not like about the article is that it had a limitted amount of qoutes, 2 tops.
joselynm2009 // November 20, 2007 at 6:11 pm |
I dont think it was even really a features article it seemed more like a journal entry, or narrative. The lead was good and the first paragraph set you up for what you wanted answers for. But it didnt sound like an article that would be in a newspaper even though it did give the information
stephanieo2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:11 pm |
Sports Section:
The article had a good use of quotes but it should have had more. I believe the writer should have had other angle to his story, by interviewing the team or just other students. Also it seemed a little opinionated at times. The lead was ok but it didnt mention what school they were from.
blancaj2011j // November 20, 2007 at 6:11 pm |
Lead: I think the lead is way too long though it fits into some of the categories of being a proper news lead.
News Value: It applies everywhere, impacts students, and it starts somewhat differently.
Quote Usage: Two quotes isn’t enough.
oscart2007 // November 20, 2007 at 6:13 pm |
I did not like that a features artical was told in a first person form. The story would be relavent in the school. It probably ould have been better with more quotes.
wendyg2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:14 pm |
This features article was good. It had the most important parts in it; the when, who, and what, but didn’t answer the other questions. I think it could have been better by including more of the opinions of the other people, input more things likes a quote here or there.
Can you make a features article into a story?
It didn’t follow the rules of a features article much. It should have been putting the spotlight on that meeting even more than it did.
manuelam2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:15 pm |
Dr. Munk Provides Exciting Lunchtime Opportunity (article)
The lead was caught my attention and was very well written.Until we get to the part were she repeats I WAS ALLOWED two times.Another thing that I had a problem with was that it didnt sound much of an features article because she repeated”I” too much.And it had only one qoute the person who wrote this article should have gotten at least qoutes from the students who attended this event.
inesm2011 // November 20, 2007 at 6:16 pm |
Sports Section
Swim and Dive ready to Launch New Season
This article’s lead is: “Back for another season of swim and dive is none other then Coach Aaron Schwartz, who is looking to the upperclassmen’s leadership this year to take the team to the Championship Meet.” It has relevance and it is a creative way of starting the article, little grammatical error though; it should be none other than.
The article itself has most of the news values, including human interest, proximity, and timeliness. Some parts of it seem as if it was a student talking about adults rather than a professional journalist. It lacks good quotes.
joselyng2010 // November 20, 2007 at 6:29 pm |
I like the news story it is simple, very neutral. However I think there can still be more details. I don’t think it is necessary to mention other schools strategies if it does not affect them. The article was about A.P test but there were no quotes from students!